1) I believe we must monitor our use of social media or else we will lose social skills,  lose valuable in-person friendships while showing the next generation that this is essential to our daily lives and that we can’t live without it.

I think I did a good job setting up the rest of my essay with my thesis statement. I took a stance, and I almost made it more extreme than it is to prove to my audience that I strongly believe it. You recommended I add more of a punch to my thesis so I thought I did that well. This also leads me well to get into my evidence, since I talk a lot about social skills and upcoming generations in my piece. I think I deliberately thought this through and I honestly think it’s pretty good.

2) I was reminded that the writing process is long. You need to set aside enough time to make revisions, as well as enough time to read through your piece multiple times. Since this was the first essay I’ve written in many months, I sort of forgot how much effort it takes to write a great essay. But, it’s also very relieving once you finish!

3) The aspect of revision I focused on the most was my thesis, and how I integrated my quotes, I changed how I introduced Konnikova and Chen when I included quotes by them. Like putting, “As Chen puts it…” instead of just saying the quote and explaining it, I focused on introducing it.

4) I’d annotate more thoroughly, I felt like I annotated well, but the more you understand the readings, the easier the essay will be. So next time, I’ll probably take a little more time on those readings to make sure I fully understand each part.